Some people say that clothes people wear are like most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by clothes they wear. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Several
people
argue that the
clothes
you wear determine who you are,
while
a number of
people
think that the
clothes
people
wear cannot make the determination of somebody's appearance.
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,
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clothes
, occupations and personalities have
correlation
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. The explanation will be explained in the next paragraph. Many
people
believe that
clothes
show what your
job
is
,
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because
the
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uniforms have important roles in the
job
field. A clear example is firefighters, they need to cover themselves with their
uniform
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uniforms
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to protect their
body
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bodies
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from
fire
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. Another one is a banker,
where
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their
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uniform shows their credibility in work and
also
to guide
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more customers.
Moreover
, garments can
also
show someone's personality,
for example
, an introvert tends to choose black or dark
color
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when they
dress
,
in contrast
, charming
people
like to
dress
with
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colorful
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or bright clothing and
they
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are well-groomed. It is common knowledge that we cannot judge a book by its cover, in
this
case
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we cannot appraise somebody by its appearance, because they have their own reasons
in
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every
dress
.
For instance
, the police are undercovered to look for information. Additional information is that many activists like to have long hair and unwell
dress
to look ridiculous, but the fact is that they know a lot of information and
they
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are overwhelmed by knowledge. All in all, I think that the
dress
we wear is connected with either our
job
or our personality.
People
will know who you are When you wear your
job
uniform, and
color
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choices
also
will determine your personality.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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