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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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When
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 immigrate to another country, one of the challenges they face is to speak in a
language
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 other than their mother tongue. It is argued that these
people
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 will face some social and practical problems. I agree with
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 statement to some extent. In my opinion,
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 it is possible for a person to learn how to communicate in daily situations in another
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, it is almost impossible for an individual to reach the proficiency of a native speaker, and
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 might cause some issues. When it comes to immigration, immigrants will have some difficulty communicating with others.
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, they will have to learn the
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 of their destination to be able to live there. I believe if
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 spend enough amount of
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practicing
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 a new
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, they will, eventually, manage to use it
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 communicating in daily situations. It is true that they will go through some difficulties, but they will get more and more fluent over
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.
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,
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 the advancement of technology, it is easier for immigrants to convey their thoughts, using different websites which are designed to translate sentences from and to various languages. Learning to speak like a native speaker,
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, seems to be impossible. Each
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 has many sophisticated words and grammatical structures that are not easy to master. It is sensible to argue that an immigrant can expand their vocabulary, but, most of the
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, they will not go
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 than a foreigner’s daily needs.
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, if they ever want to talk about an unusual topic,
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 as philosophy, they might not be able to articulate their thought clearly. Another challenging condition can be when an emergency happens, considering that in that case, there is no
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 for them to use their mobile phones for translation.
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,
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 might get into trouble, and it can range from not being able to answer a question in a job interview to not being able to report an ongoing crime to police officers. In conclusion, there are many issues that immigrants have to deal with
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 learning
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 foreign
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 and using online translation tools can mitigate the problems, I believe there are several unsurmountable ones that will make a foreigner’s life more difficult.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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