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Some people say the government should give healthcare the first priority, some others believe there are more important priorities to spend the taxpayers' money. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Taxpayers'
money
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 is being used for different purposes like the country's development,
healthcare
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, education
facilities
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 and many more. Some individuals think that improving
healthcare
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facilities
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 are much more important than any other thing because saving
people
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's life is the utmost priority. In
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 essay, I will discuss
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 and give my opinion. To commence with,
people
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 these days are spending huge amounts of
money
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 on
healthcare
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facilities
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 whether it is health checkups, medicines or doctor's fees. To explicate, it is not easy to get good treatment from any private Clinic or Hospital without spending a decent amount of
money
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 as the technologies are advanced these days and treatments are costlier.
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, my father is a diabetic patient and a major part of his income goes into medicine bills.
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, in case of any major illness like heart liver or heart disease,
people
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 lose their entire savings on private hospital bills as very few
government
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 hospital
facilities
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 are available these days. To illustrate, the
Government
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 should provide basic medical
facilities
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 in every corner of the country and apart from that,
people
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 suffering from critical illnesses
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 as cancer should be treated free of cost.
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, if
people
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 suffering from prolonged illnesses
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 as cancer or liver disease should be treated in
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 hospitals free of cost, if not provided,it puts a huge financial burden on family members.
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, in my opinion, nothing is more important than life in
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 world. Everyone can't afford good treatments from private clinics and the
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 should have to take
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 into consideration and develop a good
healthcare
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 system in the country as the first thing from taxpayers'
money
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.
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