Many people depend on their smartphones and other electronic devices for communication, work, and entertainment. To what extent do you think that this reliance on technology is affecting interpersonal relationships and face-to-face communication?

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There is no denying that several aspects of our lives are nowadays strictly dependent on smartphones and other technological tools. In my personal opinion, the electronic revolution has brought countless advantages to our daily routines, yet modifying or sometimes even neglecting the

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vis-a-vis relationships. First off, the

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decade has enjoyed paramount breakthroughs in the field of technology which have been

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conducive to endless pros in the

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of communication, work and entertainment.

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, connecting with

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who moved to the opposite side of the hemisphere, or finding the dream job thanks to an app could sound almost impossible just twenty years ago.

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, the world of information has become more widely accessible to everyone, offering citizens the opportunity to delve into innumerable topics, share their opinions, and empower them.

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, there are currently plenty of

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in diverse branches of our reality

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smartphones. On the flip side, there are

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several downsides to be considered. First and foremost, the activity of scrolling on social media to get a glimpse

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others' lives might have deleterious consequences on our well-being.

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because the amount of time spent on our screens could be used in a more beneficial and wise way,

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physical activity or reading.

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, we might risk

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a sense of dissatisfaction when comparing our lives to

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we could benefit from those minutes cherishing and being grateful for our present.

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, technology has

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up our realities from several points of view.

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, it might hinder our interpersonal

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, and our mental well-being, risking to idle away precious time.

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