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The companies and individuals should pay to clean pollution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#companies #individuals #pollution
Today it is considered that every person and big organisations should pay a fee to keep the environment clean. I fully disagree with
this
 statement and consider that everybody can care about our planet in different ways. First of all, taking into account the corruption in our country, it is not real that the fees paid by people will directed to deal with the
pollution
. It is more likely that
this
 huge amount of
money
 will directed to the private use of officials. It can be proven by today`s situation in the Ministry of Ecology, when plants and animals entered in Red Book were attacked by poachers and
also
 when fields and forests fire and no one tried to solve these problems. That`s why paying a fee to the government is not a good idea.
Secondly
, not everyone is ready to pay a huge amount of
money
 and they can deal with
pollution
 in different ways.
In other words
,
money
 is not the decisive factor in
this
 case because individuals can contribute their part in home conditions.
For instance
, sorting the rubbish can prevent the decomposition of garbage in nature and prevent water, air and soil
pollution
.
In addition
, using public transport for long distances and walking or cycling to far destinations can minimize the fuel used and the amount of greenhouse gases released into the air. In
this
 way, everyone can help the environment without paying
money
.
To sum up
, tax exemption for dealing with
pollution
 is not essential,
while
 people can prevent
pollution
 on their own.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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