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In many countries, school children are required to wear school uniforms Do you think this should be enforced in all schools?

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Owing to the cut-throat competition, people tend to give equal education to their offspring. There is a tendency to wear
school
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uniforms
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 in most countries in the world. I would argue that
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 should be applied
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 all schools
,
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 because it brings about
equality
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 among
children
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 and mitigates many social evils
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 as
child
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abuse
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. There are many benefits to wearing
school
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uniforms
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.
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,
this
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 gives
equality
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. If all students wear the same clothes, it will give
equality
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 among them, because they wear the same materials and the same fashion.
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,
due to
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 economic
issues
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, some pupils cannot purchase
high quality
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 outfits, but some can.
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,
according to
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 a recent research which was done by the social department of the University of Colombo, it reveals that 89% of
children
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 suffer from buying expensive clothes.
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, wearing a
school
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 uniform can be deemed as a boon.
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, if there are no restrictions on wearing clothes for
school
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children
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, it will influence society as well. Because
children
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 are more inclined to wear up-market dresses. To be more precise, if there is
not
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a
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uniform,
children
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 tend to wear as they wish.
This
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 results in many social
issues
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 and
this
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 tendency thoroughly influences
child
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abuse
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.
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, a well-known published article showed that schools which are allowed to wear vivid kinds of outfits for their pupils
faced
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 many problems
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 as mental disorders and
child
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abuse
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.
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, by wearing
uniforms
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, these
issues
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 can be mitigated. In conclusion,
school
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uniforms
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 can be seen in many countries. I reckon it brings about many merits
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 as
equality
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 between rich and impoverishment and it can be alleviated many social
issues
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 like
child
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abuse
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. It is recommended that the government should subsidize
school
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 uniform materials for all
school
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children
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 and impose apt (suitable)
legislations
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 for all schools to wear
uniforms
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.
Then
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 it can be beneficiated to impoverished students and
school
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children
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 can refrain from many social evils.
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