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The table given below provides information about the projected costings over the next 5 years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. The pie chart illustrates the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first year as the projects are set up

The table given below provides information about the projected costings over the next 5 years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. The pie chart illustrates the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first year as the projects are set up
The table given below provides information about the projected costings over the next 5 years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. The pie chart illustrates the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the
first
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year
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 as the projects are set up.
Overall
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, we can see that the
first
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year
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 is going to be
a
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the
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 most paid
year
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 for West Africa and Central America. Now, turning to the details, the table data apparently show that in
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first
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the first
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year
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 it is going to be 10.5
million
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. But
then
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 it is going to decrease to 2.5
million
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 dollars.
The
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last
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 fifth
year
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 it will reach 3.5
million
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.
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While
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South
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south - east
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south-east
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 Asia is going to be the only
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well-paid
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well paid
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well-paid
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 country, because there will be a stable increase.
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, it is going to start a
year
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 with 30
million
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 dollars,
then
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 it will drop to twenty
million
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,
although
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 in
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last
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the last
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 three years it will increase up to fifty
million
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.
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, money projected for Central America will be 20
million
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 for the
first
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year
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, 12
million
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 for the second and 5
million
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 for the third
year
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,
then
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 it will remain constant for the
last
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 three years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words first, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable forestry
  • projected costings
  • expenditure breakdown
  • financial commitments
  • trends
  • stability
  • funding
  • allocation
  • biodiversity preservation
  • carbon sequestration
  • sustainable land use
  • environmental conservation
  • speculation
  • long-term benefits
  • continuous investment
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