The table given below provides information about the projected costings over the next 5 years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. The pie chart illustrates the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first year as the projects are set up

The table given below provides information about the projected costings over the next 5 years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. The pie chart illustrates the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first year as the projects are set up
The table given below provides information about the projected costings over the next 5 years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. The pie chart illustrates the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the
first
year
as the projects are set up.
Overall
, we can see that the
first
year
is going to be
a
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the
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most paid
year
for West Africa and Central America. Now, turning to the details, the table data apparently show that in
first
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year
it is going to be 10.5
million
. But
then
it is going to decrease to 2.5
million
dollars.
The
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last
fifth
year
it will reach 3.5
million
.
While
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south - east
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Asia is going to be the only
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well paid
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country, because there will be a stable increase.
For example
, it is going to start a
year
with 30
million
dollars,
then
it will drop to twenty
million
,
although
in
last
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three years it will increase up to fifty
million
.
By contrast
, money projected for Central America will be 20
million
for the
first
year
, 12
million
for the second and 5
million
for the third
year
,
then
it will remain constant for the
last
 three years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable forestry
  • projected costings
  • expenditure breakdown
  • financial commitments
  • trends
  • stability
  • funding
  • allocation
  • biodiversity preservation
  • carbon sequestration
  • sustainable land use
  • environmental conservation
  • speculation
  • long-term benefits
  • continuous investment
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