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The pie chart demonstrates the data on transport and using an automobile in Edmonton.

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The diagrams demonstrate the data on transport and using an automobile in Edmonton. The table displays the purposes of using the
car
 and the pie chart demonstrates the proportion of transport types. As is presented in the table, just over
a
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half of the
people
 commute to work by
car
. Meanwhile,
small
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 minority of
people
prefers
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 to go
the
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shopping and leisure activities by machine in
city
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.
However
,
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40
percent
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 of the population uses a
car
 for carrying children to school
while
 just under a half of
people
 drive an auto for business in town. It is clear from the pie chart that around
a
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half of the
people
uses
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 a
car
 when
the
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just over
an
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one-third of individuals get on the LRT (
Ligtht
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Light
 Rail Transit). 10 percent of the
people
 pick up
the
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public transportation and the same proportion of the residents take
the
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taxi
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taxis
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 in Edmonton.
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