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The bestway to reduce youth crime is to educate parents about good parenting skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Youth crimes are said to have increased nowadays and a notion has been raised that in order to reduce
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 actions from youngsters,
parents
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 need to be taught about the skills of good parenting. I partially agree with
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 statement and in the next succeeding paragraphs, I will explain a couple of reasons why. First of all,
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 are the first people children will come to know. The actions done by the duo are reflected in their offspring and these kids will copy them without any second thoughts.
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, if both
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 are kind and patient with each other,
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 being absorbed by the child. They will
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 share the same traits as their
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 and will impose that on others as well.
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, if both guardians are always in conflict,
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 the young ones will be troubled and conflicted as well.
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, the kids will cause trouble in the future.
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, it is essential that
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 need to learn how to control their emotions and actions in front of their little ones.
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, having knowledge about good parenting skills is a wise act. A second thought to consider is the presence of a teacher in a child's life. Since most of their time is spent in school, educators have the right to guide the young generation to the right path.
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, they need to observe the learners and figure out which one is having a hard time at home so they can provide the proper help the troubled kid needs. 
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, teachers can
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 incorporate exercise and group activities
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 their
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 so they can interact and mingle with one another; building rapport and trust is considered vital in all aspects. In conclusion, mental health plays a big role in committing crimes. By equipping
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 with the necessary skills, with the help of educators, without a doubt, these steps will lessen youth crimes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parenting education
  • behavioural strategies
  • family relationships
  • communication
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • peer pressure
  • societal issues
  • poverty
  • inequality
  • comprehensive community programs
  • law enforcement
  • legal consequences
  • deter
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