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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary schools. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is considered by experts that learning a non-native
language
 during elementary
school
 is better for children
while
 others think that they should start learning the
language
 at the secondary
school
 level.
This
 essay will examine both the benefits and drawbacks of introducing primary
school
students
 to a foreign
language
. From my perspective, I believe the merits of
this
 totally overshadow the demerits. On the one hand, teaching primary
school
students
 a foreign
language
 may lead to various problems.
Firstly
, there is a very likely tendency that
students
 will get confused between their mother tongue and the second
language
, as they are still in the process of establishing their native
language
.
Secondly
, in many schools, languages are taught in a traditional way which is reading the textbooks and answering the questions.
As a result
, some
students
 will find difficulty communicating or using the
language
 in daily conversations.
For example
, a sadly huge number of Vietnamese kids are unable to speak or understand English, even though they have been exposed to the
language
 since their elementary ages.
On the other hand
,
students
 who have access to a foreign
language
 during their elementary years may master the
language
 more easily than those who start learning later.
This
 is because the flexibility in children’s brains allows them to not only remember vocabulary and grammar faster but
also
 communicate fluently and effortlessly. Another benefit of learning a different
language
 is that
students
 can spend their time developing other skills in their later ages. If a kid starts studying a
language
 when they are young, they will find it less complicated to acquire knowledge of the
language
 in their later grades and
thus
 concentrate on other subjects or skills
instead
.
To conclude
,
while
 having a kid learning a second
language
 from an early age is associated with
language
 confusion and lack of application, I believe the ability to use the
language
 natively obtained from early studying and more time spent on other skills in the future are more beneficial for children and
hence
 outweigh the mentioned disadvantages.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that the introduction clearly outlines the writer's opinion on the topic and provides a clear roadmap for the essay. The conclusion should effectively summarize the main points and restate the writer's position.
Task Achievement
The essay adequately addresses the task by discussing the benefits and drawbacks of teaching a foreign language at primary schools. Ensure that the main points are supported with relevant examples and explanations. Aim for a higher level of clarity and comprehensiveness in presenting ideas.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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  • for example
  • for instance
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  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Brain plasticity
  • Multicultural awareness
  • Curriculum
  • Globalization
  • Proficiency
  • Linguistic skills
  • Academic performance
  • Mother tongue
  • Bilingualism
  • Foreign language acquisition
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