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You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part time job. Write a letter to the restaurant's manager. In your letter, Explain that you would like to apply for the job Give some details of any relevant experience that you have Specify the date and times that would suit you

#restaurant #part #time #job #manager #date #times
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my interest in the cashier's role
that is
 newly opened at your restaurant.
Firstly
, I am highly interested in working in
this
 role as I have 2 years of work experience as a cashier at Walmart.
Also
, I am studying hotel management so working for your restaurant will be beneficial for me in the near future.
Furthermore
, my knowledge and experience regarding customer service and hotel management can be a great asset to your restaurant because the job matches my skills and interests.
Hence
, I think I can be a perfect candidate for
this
 role. In terms of availability, I am available after 3PM from Monday to Friday. On the weekends, I am generally available for the whole day. Currently, I have a week off for my exam so I will be available anytime for an interview. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to your response. Yours sincerely, Tirth T
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task achievement
Your response is very complete and addresses all parts of the task. However, you could highlight specific skills or experiences in more detail to strengthen your application.
coherence cohesion
To improve the logical structure further, you may want to create distinct paragraphs for your availability and for your qualifications in order to sharpen the focus of each segment.
task achievement
Your tone is very professional and suitable for a job application letter, which enhances your credibility and demonstrates your seriousness about the role.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of your letter are appropriate and polite, contributing to a positive first impression.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph contains a single, clear idea, making your letter easy to follow.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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