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in some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case? do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Having a private home as a property is
so
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essential for
people
 in many countries.
This
 mindset may be because of three
reasens
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reasons
 which I will say in
this
 essay. In my point of
view
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this
 situation is absolutely positive and can be beneficial.
Firstly
,
this
 is one of the goals of the 3rd world country's citizens. Because
,
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 they don’t have a strong government and
polititions
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politicians
 in order to keep the value of their local
money
in
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 the same rate each year. They experience inflation each year so they can not plan for their future. Inflation is the crisis which
enforce
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 all the
people
 in that country to think about their future to not to be homeless.
In addition
, they try so hard and
also
 overwork to earn
money
 to buy their own houses.
Also
,
this
 may be in culture to buy or build their own houses.
For example
, each
UKs
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UK
 citizen
have
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 their own
farms
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farm
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. If they couldn’t manage their budget to buy e house, they
build
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 it themselves. Meanwhile, most
people
 see
this
 as Opportunity. Rich citizens always live in rental houses because they need their
money
 for business. So, the
money
 has
invested
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 in different areas in order to make
money
 for them. I absolutely agree with
this
 attitude because it can cause a lot of positive results. When
people
 prefer to buy a house it
makes
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 several financial benefits for both themselves and the government
also
recieve
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receive
 taxes and
the
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money
 for
the
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office
works
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.
Moreover
, some
people
’s funds will be in the market because they
keen
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 to invest their
money
 in
residecial
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residential
 businesses to make more profit. In conclusion, in some countries having a home is much better than renting one. Many reasons can influence
people
 to have
this
 attitude.
For instance
, it might be cultural beliefs, inflation and
also
 the profitable overview for
billioners
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billionaires
billions
. I think
this
 is a positive situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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