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the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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The bar chart gives information about the
percentage
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 of the consequence of a survey on buying and drinking habits of
coffee
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 and
tea
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 in five
cities
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 in Australia in the
last
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 4 weeks.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
percentage
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 of city residents who went to a café for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 ranks first in four
cities
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,
while
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 that of Adelaide stands second.
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, in all
cities
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, the
percentage
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 of city residents stands
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 in buying fresh
coffee
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. Melbourne residents have the biggest proportion of going to the café for
coffee
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 and
tea
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 with approximately 63%, followed by Horbat with just above 62%. It is noteworthy that Adelaide ranks
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 with almost 50%. The highest
percentage
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 of instance
coffee
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 is allocated to Horbat with almost 55%, followed by Brisbane with 53%.
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 the share of occupants of Sydney buying instant
coffee
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 is the lowest proportion among other
cities
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 at about 45%, it has the highest share in buying fresh
coffee
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 at almost 45%.
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, there is no difference between the share of Adelaide and Brisbane in going to a café for
coffee
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 or
tea
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,
while
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 that for the latter is about 35%.
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