Reasons and the effects of copying clothes worn my celebrities

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Nowadays, fashion is most popular among young people. So, the young girl and boy are wearing like their idols.
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a good thing, that may be caused young people's creative ideas. Accounting for the discussion above, the first benefit is for clothing stores, and clothing factories if we wearing rate is much like the celebrity. Because they would like to sell more the popular clothing. The second advantage is for the staff who are working in that clothing store and a clothing factory. They can get a promotion when they sell more than their selling target.
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, I saw the sales girl who working in the market was promoted
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month. I wanted to know why she was promoted quickly. So, I asked her. She explained to me the strategy of selling. Most young girls and guys like popular fashion and they imitate their celebrity. So, I chose the selling items and sold those things. She ,
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, the creative idea of youth may be lost and the most important thing is own style . Next one thing, you can see
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unsuitable and not fashionable when the people wear like the celebrities their normal time. That looks like fun.
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, my friend wore a copy like her idol when she visited her grandma. They are surprised because
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like that Cinderella dress. In conclusion, wearing like celebrities may be enjoyable for you;
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, we need not lose our own style. So, these all things are about the reasons and effects of copying clothes worn by celebrities.
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