the audience of the male sports are more than the female sports what are the causes is it positive or a negative development.

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It is important to think about why spectators of
men
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's
sports
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are higher than
women
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. I think
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the long term. I will delve into the reasons that caused
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notion. It is irrefutable that
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have a large base
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audience mostly for male physical activity.
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to many reasons;
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,
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games offer epic and engaging
experience
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, which is the main purpose of entertainment.
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, in the past,
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were not allowed to participate in physical activities. Their role
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mainly related to culinary skills and attractive appearances, leaving the physical part for males. which
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made people attracted to watching
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play physical games.
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, the
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men
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world's
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cup
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was spectated by over a billion viewers, in
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with
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the women
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women
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cup
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which was viewed by a ten million people
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.
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, males are innately talented in games, so It is amusing to watch them play
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, as they create memorable
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.
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, female
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are suffering from
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low views,
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may have
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deteriorative
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effects in the long term.
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is because viewers equals money that comes from
advertisments
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advertisements
and sponsors. So small
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audience will
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,
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the
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female wages, and of
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they will have less motivation to play. If they are provided with equal opportunities,
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women
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women's
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sports
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will be on a whole other level of professionalism.
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, If Serina Williams gets the same salary as Rafel Nadal who is a well-known tennis player, She will have the incentives to continue playing for a long time. In conclusion, It can be reiterated that both male and female competitions are of equal entertainment, but with different
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of spectators. which could be detrimental
for
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to
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women
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sports
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender disparity
  • fan base
  • media representation
  • sponsorship deals
  • commercialization
  • stereotypes
  • athletic prowess
  • marketing strategies
  • visibility
  • cultural norms
  • gender inequality
  • grassroots initiatives
  • equal representation
  • institutional bias
  • public interest
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