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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is a belief among people in society that sharing and spreading
information
 on different
subjects
 as much as possible is a good thing. But not everyone agrees with that. Some groups of people claim that some
information
 is too valuable and shouldn't shared widely. In my opinion, sharing
information
 in scientific research, business and the academic
world
 can be beneficial. But
also
, there should be some considerations for each type of
information
. Spreading
knowledge
 as much as possible can be good in general. But it
also
 can be harmful in some ways. Sharing scientific details of how to manufacture an atomic bomb may cause some massive Worldwide harm which can change the
world
 entirely! Just imagine a terrorist has
access
 to
this
 kind of
information
. The disaster that can come from
this
 mistake is not imaginable.
However
, spreading different criteria of
knowledge
 can be beneficial.
On the other hand
, preventing the sharing of
knowledge
 and some harmless detailed
information
 may cause some difficulty in improving in a variety of
subjects
. Specifically, science will not experience improvement as much as can it .
Also
, the academic
world
 develops and improves with some background
knowledge
that is
 accessible. So limitation of
access
 to
information
 in these
subjects
 can be harmful to their improvements in many aspects. Personally, I believe in free
access
 to
knowledge
. As it was mentioned in
this
 essay, it can cause massive disasters. The solution for
this
 problem is that the
world
 of academia or any other
subjects
 should gather around and form a society that decides
access
 to what part of
knowledge
 and considers the result
due to
 the spreading of that
information
. So it can be concluded from
this
 essay that
while
 widespread
knowledge
 as much as possible can be profitable, it
also
 can bring some remarkable damages, so there should be some considerations and decisions about accessing
information
 in different criteria.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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