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It is better for student to study from home rather than go to school. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The majority of
people
 think that studying at home is better than going to
school
.
This
 writer disagrees with
this
 statement and will explain why in the essay below.
Firstly
, it can be seen that all
children
 in over the world have to go to
school
 when they are 6.
This
 rule is published by the Government and
people
 must do it in order to increase the education for
children
 and help them to have knowledge.
Secondly
, teachers at
school
 have abilities to help students gain knowledge. It can be observed that before becoming a teacher,
people
 have to pass a lot of testsmoreoverthey have to have some quality responsibility, love their job and so on. So we can easily recognize that when students go to
school
 they can easily
to
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gain
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 than study at home.
Thirdly
, going to
school
 helps
children
 to avoid
illiteracy
 . In Vietnam, in the past,
people
 did not go to
school
 so the result was
illiteracy
and
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they found it difficult with news from another place so some patriots opened classes for all ages to cut off
illiteracy
. Thanks to
this
, our country had a lot of
talents
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 and
this
 led to the development of Vietnam a lot. In conclusion, going to
school
 is very crucial and necessary for
children
 all over the world. It helps
children
 to become talented and avoid
illiteracy
.
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