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It is better for students to study from home rather than go to school . Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#students #study #home #school
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Some people think that students learn from home better than going to school .
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 writer disagrees with
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 statement because studying in an educational institution has many benefits
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 as learning new knowledge and easier to find a job . With first reason , I to choose go to an academy to study is because most teachers in all schools possess a lot of new and important education , so we need receptive to their knowledge .
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, the school
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 teaches us how to live and survive in a challenging society. Next , I choose to go to university or college for the second reason that it makes it easy to get a career. If we finish a good university or college , we will get a career with a high salary and many accompanying rewards
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 as programmers, doctors, pilots, engineers and so on .
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 , educational institutions
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 help you find the appointment you want . In conclusion , students study from home rather than going to the academy makes me unable to agree . Because school gives us many benefits
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 as giving us a lot of new education and finding a suitable place to work.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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