The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011 & 2015.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011 & 2015.
The bar graph depicts the
number
of households
differentiate
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on the basis of their total income in three different years in the U.S.
Overall
, the maximum
apartments
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number of apartments
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were of those whose earning was highest. The people whose salary was lowest around less than $25,000
they
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apply
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had 25
million
houses in the
year
2007 which slightly increased around 29
million
,
however
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,however
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it rapidly sunk
at
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to
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27
million
.
In addition
, the
number
of households with
average
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an average
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salary of $25,000-$49,999
were having
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had
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27million
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27 million
apartments in the
year
2007,
moreover
after
decade
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a decade
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it increased
to29millions
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to 29 million
.
On the other hand
, the maximum
number
of wages which was $100,000 or more was not consistent as in the
year
2007, there were 29
million
apartments which
fall
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fell
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off to 27
million
after five years,
whereas
, it dramatically rose
at
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to
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37
million
of residences in the
year
2015.
In contrast
, the
number
of houses was consistent with earnings of $50,000-$74,999 at 23million households.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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