One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

It is thought that there is

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biggest reason behind medical

care

improvement

is that humans are living longer and

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life

expectancy

is growing.

Although

it has numerous pros, I believe that the drawbacks of

this

development outweigh the benefits which will

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the following essay. The

improvement

of healthcare because of increasing

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life

expectancy

has several advantages.

Firstly

,

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industry will be boomed. As people are living longer and taking medical

care

it is obvious that they will take a huge amount of medicine throughout their whole lives.

As a result

, businesses

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are based on medicine are going to be thrived.

Furthermore

, lots of job

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will be

rised

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in

medical

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field

for improving

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the health

care

service. The more people take medical

care

, the larger number of people will be hired

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after patients.

For example

, in industrialised countries, thousands of

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and

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from my country are getting

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. There are some terrible disadvantages happening in the world as medical

care

is improving because of the increase

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life

expectancy

.

To begin

with, the

improvement

of medical

care

requires new medicines. For inventing new medicines industries are causing

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detrimental impacts on biodiversity directly and indirectly. When they invent any new vaccine or whatever,

for example

, they implement it on animals first . By doing so,

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are damaging the ecosystem.

In addition

, authorities have to take some percentages of funds from other sections to improve health

care

much more because of the consequence of

life

expectancy

improvement

. It creates detrimental effects on those sections from where funds are taken.

Therefore

, education, transportation, etc. these sorts of public services will not get sufficient funds and

thus

, these will not be developed as expected. In conclusion, even though the development of medical

care

as a consequence

of

life

expectancy

helps

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industry and

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employment, loss of biodiversity and reduction of funding from other

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are the vital drawbacks happened by it. So, I am of the opinion that the negatives far outnumber the positives.