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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In recent years, more and more individuals are taking medication to treat themselves without advice from medical physicians.
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 essay disagrees it is a positive development because
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 might not know the underlying
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 so they might miss the best chance of finding and treating it or they might get some
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effects
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 from trying the medicine. On the one hand, health problem is not a simple thing, it's possible to miss the potential causes of a simple symptom. Nowadays,
people
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 can find information about their
disease
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 on the internet and a significant number of
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 trust
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 information.
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 some data related to the
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 are true, most
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 don't know how to differentiate incorrect information. Despite
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, if the explanation about a health problem is correct, some
people
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 do not use it correctly and they are just looking for the similarity of their symptoms.
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, even though a highly experienced doctor needs some investigations or cooperation from other physicians to reach the correct diagnosis, it's less likely general
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 can confirm their medical problems without qualified knowledge.
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, all medications have different purposes and specific
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effects
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. If
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 use it in the wrong situation, it will not be effective for the
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 and it might bring some
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effects
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, some medications are contraindicated for hypertension patients and if they take those medications, it will worsen their hypertension symptoms. In conclusion,
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 should be cautious about using medicines without a prescription from doctors since they can't confirm what kind of health problem they have and the medication might not work and give unwanted
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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