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It is better for students to study from home rather than go to school. Do you agree of disagree.

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Nowadays, technology has been developed rapidly.
Therefore
, some people believe that students should study from home rather than go to school
while
 others think the opposite. I write
this
 essay to strongly agree with
this
 opinion. First of all, you can be distracted by the others. School libraries are supposed to be a perfect place for studying
for
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because of
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its
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their
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 peaceful atmosphere,
however
, the noise from tapping the table or pen can be very annoying.
As a result
, you can focus on your research
while
 you could pick a separate room in your house and enjoy studying by yourself. Some people might argue that rooms in college can
also
 afford these criteria but you will have to share with students you called roommates, so it is still inconvenient. Second of all, you have unlimited time to spend on obtaining new knowledge. In the libraries, you do not have much time to do that because you must give it back to someone else to do their
works
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work
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.
This
 circumstance is pretty similar to
study
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studying
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 at school, a large amount of time was spent absurdly
for
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on
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 other subjects and some of it might be unnecessary to you. At home, you
could
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can
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 learn everything you want at a variety of levels from medium to professional with the support of the Internet and it is free
while
 other methods must be
pay
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paid
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. In conclusion, studying at home has its own benefits, the most important is the convenience that we can learn all that we want.

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