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The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and year after it was refurbished. The charts showed a result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and year after it was refurbished. The charts showed a result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
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The given table and diagrams illustrate the sum total of
visitors
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 to
Ashdown
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Museum
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 and the final result of surveys on their satisfaction during the year before and the year after it was renovated.
Overall
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, the total number of
visitors
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 to
Ashdown
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Museum
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 increased and they
also
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 showed greater satisfaction after the renovation. During the period before the refurbishment,
Ashdown
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Museum
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 had 74,000
visitors
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. When asked how satisfied they were with their visit, two-fifths of the answers were dissatisfied. 30 per cent of people felt satisfied with their visit and the percentage of very satisfied
visitors
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 halved compared to its satisfied counterparts.
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, one out of ten people being asked had feedback of being very dissatisfied. After the renovation, the
Ashdown
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Museum
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 attracted more
visitors
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 as the figure
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 climbed up to 92,000 people. At
this
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 point, the majority of answers on how satisfied
visitors
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 felt were that they found their visit was satisfied as these took up to 40%.
This
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 was followed by the answer of very satisfied which accounted for 35%.
In addition
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, the percentage of
visitors
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 who felt dissatisfied plummeted by 25%. The same pattern was seen in the very dissatisfied segment as the figure halved compared to its of the previous period,
whereas
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 the proportion of
visitors
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 who had no response remained stable at 5% during the two periods.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, ashdown, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refurbishment
  • Visitor numbers
  • Satisfaction survey
  • Correlation
  • Facilities improvement
  • Exhibits
  • Trends
  • Modernization
  • Interactive exhibits
  • Demographics
  • Visitor profile
  • Economic impact
  • Revenue
  • Visitor experience
  • Criticism
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