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The best way to get people to use their cars less is to make them pay a road toll to drive on busy roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #cars #road #toll #drive #roads
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Today,
people
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 are using their
cars
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 wherever they go.
This
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 situation will cause pollution and bad weather in the future. To tackle
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, the government are creating a procedure to pay a
road
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 toll on busy
roads
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. It can reduce the usage of
cars
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 on the
roads
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. There are a lot of
people
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 who are using their
cars
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 on the toll
roads
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. They usually use their
cars
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 to go outside the destination. Sometimes, the usage of
cars
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 can be overwhelming and stressful. To handle
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, the government are creating a restriction when
people
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 are using the
road
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.
People
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 should pay on busy
roads
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 so it can reduce car’s volume.
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 can be good for
people
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 because it will lower the air pollution.
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,
people
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 can use public transportation to go somewhere. On the other side,
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 restriction can limit a few
people
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’s journeys. If the journey of
people
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 takes too long, they shall pay a huge amount of money.
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, companies that are using trucks for their transportation should pay other costs too.
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, the government should calculate again the impact of
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 restriction.
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, the council must take action immediately, if the
road
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 is not busy at all so
people
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 only pay for the
road
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 when the situation is busy.
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, there are positive and negative aspects. I believe that the payment of the
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 will not make an effective effort to reduce car’s volume. It will increase other problems
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 as queueing
cars
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, decreasing incomes, and so on.
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