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The graph below shows theh number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows theh number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given line chart represents how many people visited a Caribbean island and the way they stayed from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the total rate of
tourists
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 indicates an upward trend during the given period. First of all, the figure for visitors staying on cruise ships started at the lowest level
about
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of about
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 0.25
million
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 and repeated the same rate changes from 2010 to 2013, which changed between 0.25
million
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 and 0.5
million
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. In 2014, the number of
tourists
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 steadily increased, which started at 1
million
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 and doubled in 2017. In the case of visitors staying on cruise ships levelled out until 2011 at 0.75
million
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, which rose to 1.5
million
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 in 2013. From 2013 to 2017, the number of
tourists
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 who stayed on cruise ships remained at the same level, which represented 1.5
million
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while
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 just decreased to 0.75
million
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 in 2016.
Finally
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, the figure for
a
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the
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 total number of
tourists
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 who visited a Caribbean island steadily climbed, from 1
million
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 to 3.5
million
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 between 2010 and 2017.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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