Some people think that only the government can make changes in the society, while others think that individuals can have a lot of influence. What is your opinion?

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A
society
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is formed by its
people
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and has a lot many diversities and cultural variations depending upon its inhabitants. It is argued that the
government
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has the sole responsibility to lead any change in
society
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while
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others believe the significant
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of each individual. In my opinion, there is an equal responsibility, influence and action required from the
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as well as
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people
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in order to make changes in the
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. In
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essay, I will discuss the same with supportive points.
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, In different countries, there is a different system of ruling and laws.
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, in a democratic
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like India and the United States of America, the
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is formed by the
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and for the
people
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.
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, in
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system, an elected nominee of a particular
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raises societal concerns in the parliament and brings solutions back to improve that.
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, countries like China and Russia, have communist rule and all decisions for a community are made by the
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. Here individuals play a minimal
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and have no say or asked for their opinions. In my opinion,
people
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play a significant
role
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and the voice and actions needed to reform any
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.
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, inhabitants of a
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are often aware of problems( need for children's parks, parking issues, cultural celebrations etc.) and unless they report or work together to resolve or celebrate them, no outsider or even
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would be willing to take action.
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, any kind of dictatorship can only pushback any community or alternatively even in a democratic
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focus would not go into social reformation unless asked to do so by its individuals.
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, there is a debate regarding whether the
government
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or the
people
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should have the authority to bring changes to
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. In my opinion, both play an equal and crucial
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in the development of a
society
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • society
  • government
  • changes
  • influence
  • policies
  • laws
  • intervention
  • societal issues
  • collective action
  • progress
  • development
  • harmonious
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