Some people think that only the government can make changes in the society, while others think that individuals can have a lot of influence. What is your opinion?
A
society
is formed by its people
and has a lot many diversities and cultural variations depending upon its inhabitants. It is argued that the government
has the sole responsibility to lead any change in society
while
others believe the significant role
of each individual. In my opinion, there is an equal responsibility, influence and action required from the government
as well as
people
in order to make changes in the society
. In this
essay, I will discuss the same with supportive points.
Firstly
, In different countries, there is a different system of ruling and laws. For instance
, in a democratic society
like India and the United States of America, the government
is formed by the people
and for the people
. Therefore
, in this
system, an elected nominee of a particular society
raises societal concerns in the parliament and brings solutions back to improve that. However
, countries like China and Russia, have communist rule and all decisions for a community are made by the government
. Here individuals play a minimal role
and have no say or asked for their opinions.
In my opinion, people
play a significant role
and the voice and actions needed to reform any society
. For example
, inhabitants of a society
are often aware of problems( need for children's parks, parking issues, cultural celebrations etc.) and unless they report or work together to resolve or celebrate them, no outsider or even government
would be willing to take action. Moreover
, any kind of dictatorship can only pushback any community or alternatively even in a democratic government
focus would not go into social reformation unless asked to do so by its individuals.
Finally
, there is a debate regarding whether the government
or the people
should have the authority to bring changes to society
. In my opinion, both play an equal and crucial role
in the development of a society
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