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You have just spent a week with a friend on holiday.When you got home,you realised you had left your wallet there.Write a letter to your boss.In your letter: Explain the reason for the leave and the length of leave you need Explain how you will keep up-to-date while you're away Suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

#week #friend #holiday #home #wallet #boss #reason #leave #length #re #work
Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to request two days off in order to visit
to
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Regina City.
Last
 week I was there for my vaccination at my friend's house, where I forgot my wallet in which I keep my house keys and bank cards, and I don't have any spare key
that is
 why I am going there to get my things back. I will remain active during
the
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office hours for the clients and my other
co-workers
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 queries. I will keep up-to-date with the help of one of our colleagues Ashita,
since
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 she works on the same project with me
then
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she will directly approach me for any
work related
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 issue. Let me explain
that
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how I will do my office work
while
 visiting back to Regina. I am going with my other friend who will drive,
however
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 I will answer customer
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 during work hours. And I almost completed the whole report which I will email you by the next evening, and
this
 will not affect any deadline at all. Thank you for your consideration Yours sincerely Akankasha
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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