Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Although
,
It is believed that wealthy nations should offer other types of support to unprivileged states Remove the comma
apply
instead
of offering monetary aid, as offering financial help might not eradicate the problem completely, I wholeheartedly disagree with this
ideology.
The primary reason of
not supporting Change preposition
for
this
notion is that funding money
to undeveloped states could make them more independent. Government
of poor countries could utilize that Correct article usage
The government
money
to make some societal improvements such
as upgrade
Replace the word
upgrading
education
system, transformations in Correct article usage
the education
medical
field , Add an article
the medical
renovate
old-age buildings, which would Wrong verb form
and renovating
further
generate more income sources for them. For instance
, education
system in India Add an article
the education
require
Change the verb form
requires
huge
amount of Add an article
a huge
money
to transform their traditional teaching to
modern or technological teaching, which can empower their people to compete with other nations by putting theoretical knowledge into practice. Change preposition
into
Thus
, it might be more better, if they are offered some financial help .
Further
, there could be some situations, where country
needs immediate help, Add an article
the country
money
can solve the problem. To expound, If any kind of natural calamity Correct word choice
and money
such
as flooding, Correct word choice
or earthquakes
earthquakes
Fix the agreement mistake
earthquake
hit
the state, they need Wrong verb form
hits
finanace
to Correct your spelling
finance
rebuilt
their structure or help the people in their recovery, which could take Wrong verb form
rebuild
long
time.In that case, any other sort of help may not contribute much to improve the situation. To exemplify, Change the article
a long
Add an article
a recently
recently
huge earthquake rocked Change the word
recent
northern
part of Indonesia, where Correct article usage
the northern
huge
population lost their houses and loved ones. In Correct article usage
a huge
this
situation, they need money
to rebuild their lives, as they have to start from scratch. Henceforth, these circumstances demands
Change the verb form
demand
money
for reconstruction.
In conclusion, I believe that finanacial
help should be offered to poorer nations, as it would help them to become independent and tackle their issues Correct your spelling
financial
by
their own.Change preposition
on
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