Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is believed that wealthy nations should offer other types of support to unprivileged states
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of offering monetary aid, as offering financial help might not eradicate the problem completely, I wholeheartedly disagree with
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ideology. The primary reason
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not supporting
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notion is that funding
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to undeveloped states could make them more independent.
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of poor countries could utilize that
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to make some societal improvements
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system, transformations in
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field ,
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old-age buildings, which would
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generate more income sources for them.
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system in India
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huge
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amount of
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to transform their traditional teaching
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modern or technological teaching, which can empower their people to compete with other nations by putting theoretical knowledge into practice.
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, it might be more better, if they are offered some financial help .
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, there could be some situations, where
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needs immediate help,
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money
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can solve the problem. To expound, If any kind of natural calamity
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or earthquakes
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the state, they need
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their structure or help the people in their recovery, which could take
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time.In that case, any other sort of help may not contribute much to improve the situation. To exemplify,
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recently
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huge earthquake rocked
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part of Indonesia, where
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population lost their houses and loved ones. In
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situation, they need
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to rebuild their lives, as they have to start from scratch. Henceforth, these circumstances
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money
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for reconstruction. In conclusion, I believe that
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financial
help should be offered to poorer nations, as it would help them to become independent and tackle their issues
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their own.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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