Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is believed that wealthy nations should offer other types of support to unprivileged states

instead

of offering monetary aid, as offering financial help might not eradicate the problem completely, I wholeheartedly disagree with

this

ideology. The primary reason

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not supporting

this

notion is that funding

money

to undeveloped states could make them more independent.

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of poor countries could utilize that

money

to make some societal improvements

such

as

upgrade

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education

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system, transformations in

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field ,

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old-age buildings, which would

further

generate more income sources for them.

For instance

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education

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system in India

require

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huge

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amount of

money

to transform their traditional teaching

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modern or technological teaching, which can empower their people to compete with other nations by putting theoretical knowledge into practice.

Thus

, it might be more better, if they are offered some financial help .

Further

, there could be some situations, where

country

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the country

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needs immediate help,

money

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can solve the problem. To expound, If any kind of natural calamity

such

as flooding,

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earthquakes

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hit

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the state, they need

finanace

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finance

to

rebuilt

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their structure or help the people in their recovery, which could take

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time.In that case, any other sort of help may not contribute much to improve the situation. To exemplify,

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recently

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huge earthquake rocked

northern

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part of Indonesia, where

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population lost their houses and loved ones. In

this

situation, they need

money

to rebuild their lives, as they have to start from scratch. Henceforth, these circumstances

demands

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money

for reconstruction. In conclusion, I believe that

finanacial

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financial

help should be offered to poorer nations, as it would help them to become independent and tackle their issues

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their own.