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There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter •Describe the complaints that have been made •Say why the reception area is important •Suggest how the reception area could be improved

Dear Mr. Nasser I am writing to bring to your attention the complaints that I received from the visitors about our company’s reception
area
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. First of all, the primary problem is that the reception
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 is very small with a lot of chairs.
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 makes the movement difficult for our clients.
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, the air conditioning is not working well.
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, they feel bored
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 they are waiting for their appointments that no entertainment in the place.
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the reception
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 is important for several reasons. It gives a good or bad impression of the company.
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, it is the first point for the visitors to have all the information they need.
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I would suggest various solutions. We should replace the chairs with a comfortable sofa. To enhance the services, we need more employees to avoid the delay.
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, a coffee machine is always a good option for
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area
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.
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, I believe
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this
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these
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 changes will make a huge difference
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.
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thankyou
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Thank
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for
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you for
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 your care.
Youra
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Yours
 faithfully, Maryam

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structure
Use one idea per paragraph and keep to one main point in each paragraph.
grammar
Fix small grammar and spelling: 'thankyou' -> 'thank you', 'Youra faithfully' -> 'Yours faithfully', 'these changes' not 'this changes'.
clarity
Be clear with the ideas. Avoid extra details. Keep a steady tone.
closing
Close the letter with 'Yours faithfully,' and your name.
vocabulary
Use simple and clear words. Avoid long phrases.
content
You mention the problem well and give ideas to fix it.
tone
You keep a formal tone most of the time.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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