You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, give details of your study plan explain why you want to get a part time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Jaspreet, I hope you are in radiant health. I’m really excited because I will be moving to your country soon to continue my studies. I will be studying English at a local college, and my classes will mostly be in the mornings.
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, I will have some free time in the afternoons and evenings. Actually, I’m thinking of getting a part-time job
while
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studying. I would like to gain some work experience and improve my language skills.
Along with
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this
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, it will
also
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help cover my living expenses.
Moreover
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, I think it would be a great way to meet new people and settle into the new culture faster. I was wondering if you could help me find a job. Maybe you could tell me about the places that are hiring,
such
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as coffee shops, restaurants, or supermarkets. If possible, you could
also
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ask around among your friends. If you know any websites or apps where people usually look for part-time jobs, that would really help too. Thanks
alot
Correct your spelling
a lot
in advance. I really appreciate your help, and I can’t wait to see you soon. Take care, John

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Add one more clear detail about your study plan, like how long the course is.
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Say a bit more about what kind of job you want, for example weekend work or work near your college.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like also, so, and because to make ideas join more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Check small word errors like 'a lot' not 'alot'.
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You answer all parts of the task clearly.
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Your tone is warm and right for a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has one main idea, so it is easy to read.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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