News plays an important part of most people’s lives. Why is news so important to people? Why is so much news dedicated to bad news? Should the news focus on good news instead?
All around the places in
this
tangible world
, everyday news
matters to the people
as they either have direct or indirect relations to their social life. Moreover
, sometimes a particular news
could modify an individual's course of action when it is from their own realm. In this
essay, I will discuss in detail the significance of news
in people
's lives and the reasons for often unpleasant news
from the news
channels, and also
if there is any need to change this
pattern and make a shift to upright healthy news
.
Firstly
, the role of news
and daily updates is pivotal in human life. The system of news
came earlier to spread information among people
so as to make them aware of activities by the people
and for the people
(by the government). With technological advancements, ways of news
formats changed from a pigeon carrying a message to an announcer in the market in earlier years to newsrooms and channels to very recent social apps. Certainly, news
helps people
to stay connected with their surroundings and get themselves involved in this
social process. For instance
, we get updates in different fields and an interesting government announcement through news
in a particular field would likely get positive or negative reactions and could be further
modified.
Next,
regarding bad news
, unfortunately, this
is indeed true. Not to explain, more than 60% time it is distressing newsnews. It probably reflects human mentality but also
to blame the initial structure of news
. For example
, In India, newspapers started before independence and people
shared painful updates in order to fight for freedom and to enlighten people
.
However
, in the present world
, the situation is entirely different. Even though people
are making progress through technology and there are many good things happening all around the world
, despite that more people
are suffering from loneliness and related psychological issues. It is therefore
required to focus more on cheerful, encouraging and motivating news
rather than on terrible news
.
In conclusion, news
does play a considerably important role in social lives. Nevertheless
, in this
modern world
, it is important to change focus from bad news
to good news
as per the aforementioned reasons.Submitted by sonyasharma01 on
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