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Some people like to try new things for example place to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with their fields.

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In the modern era, some
people
 are interested in different sides to getting new experiences in their lives but others like to try
things
 in their fields. I think that it is a good idea for
people
 to try to do untouched activities, it may make a new step in their lives, as compared with doing
things
, which relate to their subjects. The essay aims to discuss two points of view in
this
 statement and my opinion, which will elaborate on, in forthcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, individuals join with new projects
such
 as visiting a new place, tasting foods and so on. They can lead to countless experiences in their lives.
As a result
 of
this
,
people
 can learn many
things
, which never they had.
For example
, recent studies have shown that during the COVID-19 pandemic period,
people
 tend to create
things
 innovations for spending their quarantine time and persons' happiness levels are significantly increasing
due to
 the making of new products.
Therefore
,
people
 should try to study about variety of skills because it is more beneficial to gain knowledge.
On the other hand
, the majority of
people
 do not try to join with new experiences because they are scared to touch irrelevant fields.
In addition
 to
this
, they do not have enough knowledge or confidence to engage with new areas.
As a result
 of
this
, they are prone to deal with their own business
Subsequently
, they will become an expert in their field because of keep doing more practice.
For instance
, sports players never try to go studying about space and stars. So they always try to think about how to score their targets and what techniques should improve. I believe that
people
 should tend to do new
things
 after gaining proper ideas about what they want to do well. In conclusion, some
people
 argue that experiencing untouched areas allows get more skills.
However
, other
people
 think that it is better to do activities in their
knowing
Correct word choice
own
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 fields.
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