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Some people like to try new things for example place to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with their fields.

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In the modern era, some
people
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 are interested in different sides to getting new experiences in their lives but others like to try
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 in their fields. I think that it is a good idea for
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 to try to do untouched activities, it may make a new step in their lives, as compared with doing
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, which relate to their subjects. The essay aims to discuss two points of view in
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 statement and my opinion, which will elaborate on, in forthcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, individuals join with new projects
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 as visiting a new place, tasting foods and so on. They can lead to countless experiences in their lives.
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 of
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,
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 can learn many
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, which never they had.
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, recent studies have shown that during the COVID-19 pandemic period,
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 tend to create
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 innovations for spending their quarantine time and persons' happiness levels are significantly increasing
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 the making of new products.
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,
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 should try to study about variety of skills because it is more beneficial to gain knowledge.
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, the majority of
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 do not try to join with new experiences because they are scared to touch irrelevant fields.
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, they do not have enough knowledge or confidence to engage with new areas.
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, they are prone to deal with their own business
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, they will become an expert in their field because of keep doing more practice.
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, sports players never try to go studying about space and stars. So they always try to think about how to score their targets and what techniques should improve. I believe that
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 should tend to do new
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 after gaining proper ideas about what they want to do well. In conclusion, some
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 argue that experiencing untouched areas allows get more skills.
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, other
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 think that it is better to do activities in their
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