The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. to what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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highest goal should be to promote

individuals

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lives. Does

science

should even have a goal? Or it is just a sort of way that humanity

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to get through because we can. In

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them to places which not all of them are even worth searching for.

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, there are inventions that even destroy human

life

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can improve other’s

life

ironically

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instance, the atomic bombs that hit Hiroushima and Nakazaki so maybe

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’s aim as a

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quality

promoter, the attitude behind it should be

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considered

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science

is fully separated from economic goals, though it’s not true

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health studies

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supported by cosmetic companies are mostly with

manuliated

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results. Whilst, academic studies can actually

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used as a promotion of lives, meanwhile, there are scientists

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work

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and ambitiously to reach

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findings that could lead to inventions or methods

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people can use in daily

life

or at least help a group of people,

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it’s hard to innovate new things,

science

engine will never stop. It should help people to increase their

life

quality

and quantity. In summary, Scientific

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are founded

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our knowledge gaps which are exactly the issues that we are facing,

further

problems decrease our

life

quality

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solving the issue is increasing

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life

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it can be dangerous if it

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felt

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hands.

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crucial role
technological advancements
medical discoveries
life-changing inventions
innovations
solutions to human problems
enhancing quality of life
improvement of healthcare
transportation
communication
agriculture
energy sectors
eradication of diseases
prolongation of life expectancy
global challenges
climate change
overpopulation
food security
developed world
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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. to what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Fully explain your ideas

In spite of the advances in medicine, many people around the world still die of easily preventable diseases. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

In some places old people is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the past, people ate local food in season, but nowadays, people can buy a variety of food from all over the world. Do the advantages of this development outweigh it disadvantages?

children who are brought up in families that do not have large amount of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brough up by wealthy parents. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?