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Memorising facts is the most important way to succeed in education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is commonly believed that the best
way
 to succeed in
education
 is by memorizing a variety of subjects. In my view, I disagree with
this
 statement, as
education
 should not be considered as a tool but as a goal to gain new
knowledge
 and skills. On the one hand,
the
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memorization can help
people
 to collect new things into their brains.
For instance
, students who are working usually do not have enough
time
 to read some books fully in order to prepare for their exam, and the only
way
 is by memorizing the
topics
that
is
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 examined by the teachers.
Therefore
, many
individuals
 use
this
method
 to reduce the amount of studying
time
 and they hope the
method
 could help them to finish the exam and achieve the score that they desire
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.
On the other hand
,
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memorization is not an effective
way
 to support
people
's
education
. I believe there is a
method
 that can be used by
individuals
 to acquire new
knowledge
. To illustrate, many
people
 do not get perfect scores on their exams since they only
memorizing
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 the
topics
 in a short period of
time
.
Furthermore
, most
of
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schools teach their students to memorize the formulas of mathematics without
tell
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 the understanding and the implementation
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of
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 their everyday activities.
As a result
, the understanding of a variety of
topics
 is needed by
people
 who desire
gaining
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to gain
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 their
education
 level, but
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individuals
 should sacrifice a lot of
time
 to understand many subjects in order to succeed in the future. To summarize, there is a statement that states the
method
 of memorizing a variety of facts could help the
individuals
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success
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 in
education
. In my view,
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memorizing some
knowledge
 is not an effective
way
 to obtain new skills and
knowledge
while
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people
 should combine memorization with a great understanding of the
topics
, so success in
education
 is possible for them.
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