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Some people think that it is the responsibility of governments to take care of the environment, while others believe that it is the responsibility of the citizens. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People
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 believe that saving the
environment
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 is the only responsibility of the
government
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. The
government
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 should protect all aspects of the
environment
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such
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 as forests, parks, gardens, roads and many more.
On the contrary
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, some
people
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 think that the responsibility for protecting the
environment
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 is not only for the
government
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 but
also
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 for all
citizens
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. The
government
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 usually creates some procedures and regulations to save the
environment
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. It can be done from little things to specific ones.
This
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 situation should suggest
people
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 for saving the
environment
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. Sometimes, it can be hard for the council to take care of all aspects of the
environment
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. If the
citizens
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 do not feel responsible for managing the
environment
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, it can be dangerous. There will be a lot of problems that can be impacted. Air pollution is an example of a damaged
environment
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.
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, our earth will be hazardous for human living.
On the other hand
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, all
people
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 have the same responsibility to take care of our
environment
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. They should work together between the
government
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 and all
citizens
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 so the
environment
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 will be in a better condition.
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, if the council produces new regulations for restricting the usage of fossil fuels,
citizens
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 must follow regulations.
This
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 can be good for our
environment
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 so it can increase our health rate. In the end, collaboration among all individuals in the world can create a better human life in the future.
To conclude
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, there are several negative impacts if
citizens
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 are not involved in protecting the
environment
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. They should protect and manage the
environment
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 safely.
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, the collaboration with the council will have a good opportunity for the
environment
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 to be a human living.

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Coherence & Cohesion
You should ensure that your essay follows a clear and logical structure throughout, with distinct paragraphs for each idea. Aim for a smooth progression of ideas, with appropriate linking words and cohesive devices.
Coherence & Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are important components of your essay. They should clearly present the topic and your opinion, and summarise the main points discussed, respectively. Your introduction could be more precise and your conclusion more summarised.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your main points need to be developed and supported by specific examples or evidence. Avoid making general statements without backing them up with detailed examples or explanations.
Task Achievement
Make sure you address all parts of the task, and give a balanced discussion of both views mentioned in the prompt before providing a clear opinion. Ensure your opinion is consistent throughout the essay.
Task Achievement
Ideas should be fully extended, providing clear and well-developed arguments for your viewpoint. Avoid overly simplistic statements and ensure that your essay's ideas are comprehensive and insightful.
Task Achievement
Include a wider range of relevant examples to support your arguments. Specificity adds depth to your discussion and demonstrates your ability to relate theoretical ideas to real-world contexts.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable practices
  • environmental protection
  • grassroots movements
  • community-led initiatives
  • policy implementation
  • regulations
  • funding
  • innovative solutions
  • collective effort
  • advocate
  • enforce laws
  • energy-efficient
  • reduce waste
  • recycling
  • sustainable outcomes
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