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The two pie charts illustrate why British do migration to and from during a question period.

The two pie charts illustrate why British do migration to and from during a question period.
The given pie charts show the
reason
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 people in the United Kingdom immigrated and
emigration
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 through several questions in 2007. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that the main
reason
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 for both
immigration
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 and
emigration
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 was dominated by definite jobs.
However
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, formal study was not the main
reason
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 for
emigration
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 compared to no
reason
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 at all for
immigration
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. In terms of
immigration
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, definite job and formal study lead the
reason
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 for migration with 30% and 26%, respectively.
Furthermore
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, accompany accounted for half the number of definite jobs whilst looking for work and other is just 3% and 1% lower, respectively. The rest of it left no
reason
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 stated. Regarding
emigration
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, the definite job is just 1% lower and looking for work is 10% higher compared to
immigration
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. No
reason
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 stated is three times higher than that of
immigration
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, followed by other reasons at exactly 14% and formal study at a mere 4%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words reason, emigration, immigration with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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