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Many people believe that healthy eating and the importance of healthy food should be taught in schools. Others say that parents should teach their children about healthy food and diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion with relevant examples.

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It is irrefutable that being healthy and in good shape is crucial to
productive
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 life.
While
 some folks think that educational institutions should teach subjects related to health, others think that it is the
family
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family's
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 duty to
educates
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 their
children
 about healthy lifestyles. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both of these arguments and state my opinion. On
one
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 hand,
schools
 should teach students about the importance of eating proper
food
 and being healthy.
This
 is because a strong body means
strong
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a strong
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 mind, and with
strong
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a strong
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 brain comes great achievements and academic success.
For instance
, athletic students always excel in academic subjects, because they have healthy bodies that aid them in focusing when studying. If
schools
 disregarded health-related subjects, it would cause deterioration in the students' physical and
academical
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 achievement.
On the other hand
, families have a huge burden to discipline their
children
 into healthy
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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.
This
 is
due to
 the responsibility of both
parents
, as youngsters spend more time in their homes rather than in
schools
.
For instance
,
parents
 should control the diet inside and outside the house,
moreover
, they must prevent the eating of sugary snacks that are considered to be one of the major causes of obesity in teenagers. If the
children
 are allowed to eat whatever they want,
this
 would have
devastating
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 effect on the
children
's health. In my opinion, both
of
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parents
 and
schools
 should share in teaching the youth about
the
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 healthy lifestyle and the importance of avoiding junk
food
 and eating proper
food
 that
benfit
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benefit
benefits
 the body. In conclusion, having a good mind and body for
children
are
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 always related to eating good
food
. And it is
shared
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a shared
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 duty between
schools
 and
parents
.
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