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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, give details of your study plan explain why you want to get a part time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Raneem I hope you’re doing well. I’m really excited because I’ll be moving to your country soon to continue my studies. I’ll be studying English at a local college, and my classes will mostly be in the mornings, so I’ll have some free time in the afternoons and evenings. I’m thinking of getting a part-time job
while
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 I’m studying. I want to gain some work experience, improve my language skills, and
also
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 help cover my living expenses. I think it would be a great way to meet new people and settle into the culture faster. I was wondering if you could help me find a job. Maybe you could tell me about places that are hiring, like cafés, shops, or supermarkets, or even ask around among your friends. If you know any websites or apps where people usually look for part-time jobs, that would really help too. Thanks a lot in advance. I really appreciate your help, and I can’t wait to see you soon! Take care, Ghoud

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improve task response
Add a few dates and plan for when you study and when you can work.
improve coherence
Link ideas with small words like and, also, but to help flow.
task response
Plan for study and the reason to work is clear.
coherence cohesion
The tone is friendly and easy to read.
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