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The chart below shows the internet users (in millions) in different countries in the Middle East as of June 2017. 150 words minimum

The chart below shows the internet users (in millions) in different countries in the Middle East as of June 2017. 150 words minimum
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The given chart illustrates in June of 2017, the
amount
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 of
internet
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users
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 in numerous nations of the Middle East. The measuring unit is millions.
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, there were 9 countries in the comparison, including Iran, Saudi Arabia, Iraq, United Arab Emirates, Yemen, Israel, Jordan, Syria and Lebanon. The largest number of
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users
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 was in Iran
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 the smallest was in Lebanon. At
the
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first glance,
it is clear that
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 people in Saudi Arabia represented the second most significant number of network
users
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 at 24.15
million
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 which was 6 times higher than Lebanon (around 5
million
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users
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) and almost half of the
internet
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 population of Iran (at 56.7
million
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).
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, five countries, namely the United Arab Emirates, Yemen, Israel, Jordan and Syria all revealed a similar range of
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users
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 and accounted
from
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 6-9
million
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 (8.52, 6.91, 6.64, 6.3, and 6.03
million
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, respectively). It is
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 noticeable that the net
users
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 in Iraq only showed exactly 14
million
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.

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