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Some people think that robots are important for human's future development . Others think that robots have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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few people are of the opinion that robots are prominent for human's future development,
whereas
, some argue they
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 and have adverse effects on the community. Though every scientist invents new technology to pose that in the right way,
this
 new technology
also
 has its pros and cons, in accordance with the usage of automation.
Firstly
 talking about the disadvantages of
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, these are no using artificial
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intelligence
 which is
otherwise
 known
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 AI. Governments are planning to use them on the war front because they are programmed brilliantly , which is a dangerous decision , as they are programmed to wage a war on the
oponent
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opponent
, irrespective of humans or another robot. These days they are
also
 using them to hack computers and security systems
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. Alternatively , those machines are
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 technology, they are helpful in various ways. They are programmed in
such
 a way,
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 can complete a particular task in no time, which
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 to be performed by multiple persons. They reduce the time
ans
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and
 save human efforts,
therby
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thereby
 giving a handsome profit to the companies. Nowadays we find them, particularly in manufacturing units. FMCG'S, etc. They are doing a great job, in the aspects of helping humankind in domestic help
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most importantly we are
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, all the new revolutionary technologies have both sides of
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,i.e., if used in a positive moto, they are a lot of use for the human, else they even destroy mankind.
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