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Many people feel it is a waste of money to try to save endangered animal species, for example the tiger or the blue whale. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, many countries set up large amounts of money to protect endangered animal
species
.
While
 some
people
 doubt that it is a waste of money, I believe humans should never give up saving endangered
wildlife
. On the one hand, some
people
 indicate that the government should not spend money on saving
wildlife
 since there are millions of
people
 suffering from hunger and a poor economy. In my opinion, it is vital to improve the living quality of refugees from different regions for sure. The high budget for helping them to face the difficulties of hunger, and lack of educational and medical resources is not the reason for us to give up saving endangered
wildlife
.
Furthermore
, the authorities should find a balance point between different aspects.
On the other hand
,
species
, plants and nature link with each other and become a cycle of life. The extinction of any
wildlife
 will break the current ecological balance and definitely
leads
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lead
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 to serious consequences.
For example
, the ocean will become fishless, lands will become barren, and both food and clean water will turn to shortage.
Moreover
, scientists often found special chemicals that could help humans defeat viruses in animal
species
' body tissue or blood.
For instance
, special chemicals that are used in drugs that help cure HIV are found in
tiger’s
Correct article usage
the tiger’s
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 blood. Saving endangered animal
species
 is
also
 keeping access to the ingredients of certain drugs for human beings. On the whole, the lives of humans and animals are equally valuable.
People
 should support refugees meanwhile saving endangered animal
species
.
In addition
, it is necessary to save endangered animal
species
 to keep ecological balance and for medical purposes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • intrinsic value
  • existential threat
  • ecosystem
  • conservation
  • economic benefits
  • funding allocation
  • competing needs
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