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some people think that hosting an international sporting event is beneficial for a country while others disagree. Do the advantages of hosting major sporting events outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, individuals encourage hosting an international sporting
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 because it has a significant impact on a nation. In my opinion, the advantages are more than the disadvantages. In
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 essay, I will discuss both sides of
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 issue. On the one hand, there are many benefits of hosting an international sporting
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 and many countries prefer to host these events because that helps to increase the income of the hosting country.
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: the players and audiences who come to an interest in
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 use different facilities
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 as accommodations, food and transport.
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, they pay to book a seat to watch the match.
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, all countries that participate in
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 pay for a hosting country to book a court.
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, some people throw their rubbish and they don't concern about the place.
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, younger people break the facilities when they aren't satisfied with the results of the match.
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, we can avoid these behaviours by making the rules for them. In
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 case, most people will don't do these behaviours. In conclusion, there are many advantages of hosting sporting events and these advantages are more than disadvantages as I mentioned before. I think hosting
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 has a good impact on the nation and I promote something like
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event
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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