Development in technology causes envionmental problems. Some people believe the solution in these problems is everyone accepts asimpler way of lfe, while others say that technology can solve these problems. Discuss both views and glve your own opinion.

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Technology

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has made life much easier, but

unfortunately

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it has

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made a devastating impact on the

environment

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some may think that the solution lies in abandoning

the

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technology

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and living a

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life, others see that modern

machines

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are reliable on,

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problem.

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essay will discuss both arguments and, in my opinion, I think that machinery can help in solving the environmental issue.

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with, using

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machines

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and depending on alternative sources to save the

environment

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is indeed a good choice.

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, if everyone used

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cars

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and walked to work

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, it would improve the quality of the air.

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amount of carbon emissions will decrease significantly and

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leads

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to cleaner air to breathe and an improved atmosphere.

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, if factories depended on

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gas-based

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lower the pollution caused by those

machineries

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, Egypt has established a law that

minimize

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the usage of machinery and

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on alternative greener sources. To sum it up, it has been quite difficult to decrease the usage of

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but it is in some

people

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opinion a good choice to save the

environment

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, some individuals think that the problem makers are the lifeline for solving it,

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Machines

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can figure out how to save the

environment

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. Solar plants can harvest the sun’s energy and convert it to electricity that supplies all countries around the globe with clean energy,

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, the fossil fuels which emit harmful gases will be redundant.

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electrical

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cars

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are great substituent for conventional

cars

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that pollute the atmosphere and it decreases the need for fossil fuels.

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recent research shows that by 2030, carbon

emission

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will

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by 80% owing to

electrical

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cars

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. To summarize, environmental

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can be solved with the assistance of

technology

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. In my opinion, modern techs can be used to help in coming up with solutions to save the

environment

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, it just

need

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the proper guidance by humans and

creative

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. In conclusion, it can be reiterated that

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techs have merits and demerits when it comes to

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environment

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, it depends more on

human

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way of using the

technology

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. It can be used to save or to deteriorate the atmosphere.

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Development in technology causes envionmental problems. Some people believe the solution in these problems is everyone accepts asimpler way of lfe, while others say that technology can solve these problems. Discuss both views and glve your own opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

It’s generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance, music and sport and others are not. However, it’s sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sportsperson or musician. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

Teenagers should have regular exams at secondary school as this will prepare them better for life after leaving school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work of its members. Compare the contributions of artists to society with the contributions of scientists to society. Which type of contribution do you think is valued more by your society? Give specific reasons to support your answer.

Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some children spend hours everyday on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?