The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals

during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and

make comparisons where relevant.
The linear graph describes the average monthly fluctuations in the values of three
materials
, namely:
copper
,
nickel
, and
zinc
.
Overall
, there are two general trends:
copper
and
nickel
showed a decrease in the graph,
however
,
zinc
rose gradually over the each month in 2014 by percentages. Looking into more detail, the costs of the
materials
decreased dramatically from January to June.
Nickel
described mild fluctuations with around 9% changes, which showed more price changes than the two other
materials
.
Moreover
, the same element showed its lowest point in June,
along with
the
copper
and
zinc
. Interestingly, each of the prices of
materials
showed a steady point between July and September. Afterward,
nickel
and
zinc
illustrated a gradual rise in the middle of autumn, but surprisingly, the cost changes of
copper
decreased at the same time.
Finally
,
at the end
of 2014, each element had mild fluctuations between 1 and 2%.
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