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Scientists argue that the use of modern gadgets, such as cellphones and tablets, by young people has the potential to boost creativity. Do you agree or disagree?

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Modern
gadgets
 like smartphones and tablets are widely used by young
people
. Could these
devices
 boost
creativity
 among youngsters potentially?
This
 is a controversial question for
scientists
. I, personally, believe that if these
devices
 are used properly, they have the ability to bring
creativity
 to the youth. On the one hand, it has been said that young
people
 waste a huge amount of
time
 using modern
gadgets
 so, they cannot think broadly or concentrate on what they should do and just do an aimless activity.
However
,
this
 seems kind of cliché to a group of
scientists
 and they state that the
time
 usage of modern
devices
 is not an idleness. They claim that
although
 these
gadgets
 are apparent
time
 consumer
devices
, they create wonderful opportunities given to young
people
 to become familiar with a wide variety of activities, ideas, and scientific issues. As they encounter a new topic, not only do more related ideas come to their mind but
also
 motivate them to continue searching which leads to even more
creativity
. In regard to the
creativity
 that
such
devices
 bring, it has been seen that many
people
 use their cellphones or tablets for games, raddles, drawing, or design. These activities are linked with thinking.
in
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 fact, the more
time
 they spend on these activities through modern
gadgets
, the more creative person they will become. It has been proven that the individuals who play more games or riddle, have a wider horizon and they can solve the problems far easier than others. Artists or drawers, in the other case, have a great opportunity for trial and error. They can implement whatever comes to their mind in these
devices
 without worry and improve their design until they are satisfied. In conclusion, the youth whether they are gamers or artists or whatever, can benefit from the potential of these
devices
.
Although
 there is an argument among
scientists
,
according to
 a statement of some
scientists
, the usage of these modern
gadgets
 can make them a more creative person. As I said earlier, I agree with
this
 group of
scientists
.
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