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The chart below shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of two air pollutants in four big cities in 2000.

The chart below shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of two air pollutants in four big cities in 2000.
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The bar chart illustrates the average bottom and peak levels per day of two air contaminants in four cities, namely,
Los
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Angeles
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, Calcutta, Beijing and
Mexico
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 in 2000.
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, as it is demonstrated, the typical presence of Dinitrous Oxide and Sulphur dioxide was much higher in
Mexico
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 than in the other three countries,
while
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Los
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Angeles
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 suffered from these hazardous pollutants the least. In
Calcutta
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 the maximum amount of Dinitrous Oxide accounted for
the
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level
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 52, which was half of the highest number of
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 air impurity in
Los
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Angeles
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, namely, 104. In terms of the minimum levels of environmental toxins, in
Beijing
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 the amount of N20 was on
the
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level
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 14, which constituted almost one-eighth of the smallest quantity of Dinitrous Oxide in
Mexico
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. The
level
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 of Sulphur Dioxide in the air of
Los
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Angeles
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 varied from 1 to 10, which was an enormously small number compared to other cities. Meanwhile, in
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Mexico
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 the
level
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 of
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 contaminant was the highest, which accounted for 200 and was about 3 times as many as in Calcutta.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words los, angeles, mexico, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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