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Question It is observed that today communication between family members in today’s times is less as compared to the past. However, some people do not think so. Do you agree or disagree?

#communication #members #today’s #times #people
It is often said that
nowdays
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 connections among
the
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intimate families
is
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 less in relation to the earlier.
However
, others have opposite ideas. I strongly agree with the first opinion and I will argue both perspectives as follows.
To begin
 with, in the past,
people
 lived in tandem in most of the time they did a plethora of
hardwork
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hard work
 with the help of each other.
For instance
, when they wanted to construct something
such
 as
house
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, other folk
make
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contribution
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 to finish the work.
This
make
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a
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good communication around them. In
additon
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addition
 to
this
, most of the individuals were dependent on one another in the past
becuase
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because
 their jobs were related to other parts of the family. What's more, there
were
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 no indication of the technology and they had to do
many
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stuff together.
In contrast
,
todays
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people
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are engaged
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engaged
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with
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a
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humongeous
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humongous
, and at times not important things, that
makes
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make
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 members of the family
lives
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live
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 miles away from home, so
reduce
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reduces
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 the intimate relationship between them.
Furthermore
, with the
advend
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advent
 of the
technolgy
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technology
, especially by introducing
smart phone
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many
people
 will spend their time
involving
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involved
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 in trivial videos or other activities on social media.
This
 is the chief reason that makes
people
 be apart in terms of physically and emotionally.
Also
, the hardship of living condition is another reason that cause individuals lives apart from each other engaging with their lifestyles
as a result
 it will
dwingle
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dwindle
 the
connetion
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connection
amogst
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amongst
 them. All things considered, I think the
relashinships
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relationships
 and connections among
people
 nowadays
is
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are
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 much less than in the past.
This
 is
due to
 the
introduce
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 the modern technology and
economical
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hard
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economic condition
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condition
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conditions
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.
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