Question It is observed that today communication between family members in today’s times is less as compared to the past. However, some people do not think so. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is often said that

nowdays

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connections among

the

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intimate families

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less in relation to the earlier.

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, others have opposite ideas. I strongly agree with the first opinion and I will argue both perspectives as follows.

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with, in the past,

people

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lived in tandem in most of the time they did a plethora of

hardwork

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hard work

with the help of each other.

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, when they wanted to construct something

such

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house

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, other folk

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contribution

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to finish the work.

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make

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good communication around them. In

additon

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addition

this

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, most of the individuals were dependent on one another in the past

becuase

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because

their jobs were related to other parts of the family. What's more, there

were

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no indication of the technology and they had to do

many

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stuff together.

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todays

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today's

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people

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are engaged

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engaged

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with

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humongeous

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humongous

, and at times not important things, that

makes

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members of the family

lives

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miles away from home, so

reduce

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reduces

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the intimate relationship between them.

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, with the

advend

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advent

of the

technolgy

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technology

, especially by introducing

smart phone

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many

people

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will spend their time

involving

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in trivial videos or other activities on social media.

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is the chief reason that makes

people

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be apart in terms of physically and emotionally.

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, the hardship of living condition is another reason that cause individuals lives apart from each other engaging with their lifestyles

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it will

dwingle

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dwindle

the

connetion

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connection

amogst

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amongst

them. All things considered, I think the

relashinships

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relationships

and connections among

people

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nowadays

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much less than in the past.

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due to

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the

introduce

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introduction

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the modern technology and

economical

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apply

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hard

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economic condition

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condition

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conditions

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

274 words

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Question It is observed that today communication between family members in today’s times is less as compared to the past. However, some people do not think so. Do you agree or disagree?

As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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