Parents, particularly mothers, do not go to work to take care of family. Some people say that the government should give some money to those parents. do you agree or disagree with the satement? give reasons to your answers and give example to support your views.

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It is said that
females
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who usually don't go out to work should be given monthly stipends. It is thought that the
government
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should allocate
large
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part
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of its finances
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financing unemployed
females
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. In my opinion,
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is a great idea. I strongly support
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viewpoint and I will
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explain my reasons in the following paragraphs. First and foremost, women who are
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, tend to stay at
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because they want to spend most of their time with children.
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also
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means that they like to prefer to stay at home in order to serve their families.
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to
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, many
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are educated but still they prefer to stay at
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homes
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and handle the household chores.
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, they never find time for themselves and their careers. To put it simply, they are fully indulged in the household chores and spend their time with family and children.
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, there are many
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who have
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education but sadly, they are forced by their husbands to stay at
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.
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, it is a good thought that the
government
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should consider paying a monthly stipend to these unemployed
females
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.
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, women, especially
mothers
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, who have invested a large
part
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of their lives in their families should
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be considered.
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, they should be the first priority because we exist only because of our
mothers
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. They have invested a huge
part
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of their lives working for us.
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, they have worked tirelessly for their families day and night.
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, I
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believe that successful people have achieved success
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their
mothers
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' efforts.
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, if
mothers
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were not working tirelessly for their offspring, nobody could be successful.
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, the
government
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should provide financial aid to the unemployed
mothers
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as well.
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, I strongly agree with
this
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viewpoint that the
government
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should allocate a large
part
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of its finances to help
females
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who are not working.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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