Parents, particularly mothers, do not go to work to take care of family. Some people say that the government should give some money to those parents. do you agree or disagree with the satement? give reasons to your answers and give example to support your views.

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It is said that
females
who usually don't go out to work should be given monthly stipends. It is thought that the
government
should allocate
large
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part
of its finances
in
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financing unemployed
females
. In my opinion,
this
is a great idea. I strongly support
this
viewpoint and I will
further
explain my reasons in the following paragraphs. First and foremost, women who are
family oriented
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, tend to stay at
homes
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because they want to spend most of their time with children.
This
also
means that they like to prefer to stay at home in order to serve their families.
In addition
to
this
, many
females
are educated but still they prefer to stay at
their
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homes
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and handle the household chores.
As a result
, they never find time for themselves and their careers. To put it simply, they are fully indulged in the household chores and spend their time with family and children.
For example
, there are many
females
who have
good
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education but sadly, they are forced by their husbands to stay at
homes
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.
Thus
, it is a good thought that the
government
should consider paying a monthly stipend to these unemployed
females
.
Secondly
, women, especially
mothers
, who have invested a large
part
of their lives in their families should
also
be considered.
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In fact
, they should be the first priority because we exist only because of our
mothers
. They have invested a huge
part
of their lives working for us.
In other words
, they have worked tirelessly for their families day and night.
Moreover
, I
also
believe that successful people have achieved success
due to
their
mothers
' efforts.
For example
, if
mothers
were not working tirelessly for their offspring, nobody could be successful.
Therefore
, the
government
should provide financial aid to the unemployed
mothers
as well.
To conclude
, I strongly agree with
this
viewpoint that the
government
should allocate a large
part
of its finances to help
females
who are not working.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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