Some people say that adverting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Others think that advertisement is common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss the both these views and give your opinion.

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It is true that

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has become an essential part

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businesses in all areas of marketing.

However

while

some people tend to consider them as tedious and annoying, I do not completely agree with

this

idea. One of the main positives of advertisement is the possibility to familiarize yourself with the product and brand as well.

For instance

, many of us will not know about companies

such

as Apple, Samsung and LG if the promotion of these organisations

have

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not existed.

Hence

, our society

tend

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to persuade goods

due to

these ads, which

increaces

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increases

shops

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sales. Another good reason is that our life and technologies develop every day, so

products

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promotion will

also

grub

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our attention every time.

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According to

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statistics, the great majority of people are fascinated by advertisements that use interesting themes and effects Turning to the other side of the argument, it is obvious that

adverting

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advertising

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gets more annoying. When I open my

instagram

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Instagram

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facebook

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page, I see a lot of ads, which is not necessary for me.

This

over-advertising everywhere discourages buying stuff.

Moreover

, because of these steps, humans claim more and more. Actions must be taken urgently,

otherwise

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brands will face even greater problems in

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the furure

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furure

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future

. In conclusion,

although

many people mainly say that

adverting

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advertising

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is not relevant, I believe that it attracts our attention and allows companies to make more money

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