In some cultures, older people are valued most highly. In other cultures, youth is valued more than experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion as to which age should be most valued.

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traditions, aged individuals are valued most. In other civilisations, youngsters
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valued more than seniors. In upcoming
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both views and
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think it is both equally important. To commence with, respecting elders is an important thing but neglecting younger ages is not good
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, old ages are rich in experience. People should respect them from the bottom of their heart because they always give them blessings when a person give them respect. They always take responsibility
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their children's
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. They pay all their fees from their childhood to their university to make them
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in life. They do not
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care of their child.
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ready to protect their child from any problem. To explain, A father died to protect his
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child from
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in
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.
On the other hand
, Respecting youngsters are
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very important because they are already stressed with their studies and job problem. Sometimes they are emotionally broken
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Other people should know the feelings of
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youngsters
and give them courage. They want someone to share their feelings. To elaborate, a survey conducted in
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in which 70 youngsters per day died just because they were scolded by their parents. They
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also
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respected by others.
To conclude
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young individuals cannot be neglected.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wisdom
  • experience
  • historical context
  • traditional knowledge
  • custodians of culture
  • societal values
  • historical narratives
  • contributions to society
  • long-term perspective
  • energy
  • innovation
  • adaptable
  • driving societal change
  • embracing new ideas
  • economic factors
  • thriving economy
  • productivity
  • physical vitality
  • investing
  • continuous progress
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